Cell phones in schools- Fixed

A month ago, my principal decided that students would not be allowed to bring cell phones to school.She made this decision because there is a problem in our school, since students bring their cell phones with them to class, and use them during the lessons. I agree with this decision to not bring cell phones to class.

Cell phones damage the students' concentration and it affects their grades. When they play with their cell phones during class, they concentrate only on their phone and they do not listen to the teacher or write anything in their notebooks. This problem makes the students lose a lot of important material and as a result, they fail in tests. 

Another reason why cell phones are not needed in schools is the radiation.When the students sit in class with their cell phones, a lot of radiation is emitted and it can cause the students to health problems and one of them is cancer.

In conclusion, bringing cell phones to class has many disadvantage. They make the students fail in tests,might make them sick because of the radiation. Even though the other students in school think that this rule is bad,I think that this rule is very useful and the lessons are much quieter thanks to it.

Very Good work.
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Daphna

School activities-Fixed

School activities are important activities, which enrich the students' knowledge and let them know about their country's culture. In our school, we go to many activities, such as going to a play, field trips and movies. I think that these activities are very beneficial and expand the students'  horizons.

My favorite activity is going on field trips. Field trips make you know your country better and illustrate the things you have learned in class in a more fun and interesting way. For example, after we learned about the change in the Israeli coastal plain from the year 1850 until today, we went to Tel Aviv to see how and where the changes occurred. After that trip, I understood the material better and I got 100 in the test. This example shows how the field trips are very effective on the students' understanding and grades.

Another favorite activity of mine is going to a show in the theatre.These shows enrich the language of the students. In the show, the actors use a literary language, which helps the students to learn new words and talk differently.Shows also allow the students to know famous playwrights, who lived a long time ago, and without these activities we would not be exposed to them and know them at all. For example, I once went with my school to see the famous theatre show "Romeo and Juliet". Before that theatre show, I did not know the story. Thanks to this theatre show, I know the storyline and also the writer of this theatre show ,William Shakespeare.

In conclusion, school activities have many benefits, they are important for general knowledge, they help the students to understand the material better and they let the students relax from school for one day and have fun. In my opinion, all the school activities are important for the students knowledge and in our school, the activities are very interesting and every activity is necessary.I do not want any of these activities to be replaced or canceled.

Very good.
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Daphna

Describe a famous person- Fixed

Leonardo da Vinci was a famous painter and scientist and one of the most famous people in the history of the world. He was known for his paintings and inventions. I learned about him in school three years ago in art lessons. I think he was a unique person, who knew most of the science fields.

Leonardo da Vinci was born in Italy in 1452. He started to paint when he was a young teenager. He painted pictures of beautiful or ugly people, he was one of the first caricaturists and cartoonists. He painted a lot of famous paintings such as The Mona Lisa, The Last Supper and The Vitruvian Man. Leonardo also wanted to fly, he studied about birds and insects and he built a model of a flying machine.

From drawings that Leonardo made for himself we see that he had a long beard and that he was bald. Leonardo was connected to many people and world leaders, such as the pope, the king of France and other famous painters in his life and that shows the appreciation he gor in his life and that he was a friendly figure.

In conclusion, I think that Leonardo was a very important man, who affected the period he lived until today. Leonardo da Vinci was one of the biggest artists and scientists in histroy. His paintings affected art and his inventions affected science and this is why I think that Leonardo was one of a kind.

Movie review- Fixed

In the new year holiday I went to see the movie "Resident Evil: Afterlife" with my friends. This film is an action, adventure and horror movie. This is the fourth film in the series of movies called "Resident Evil".

The movie takes place in Los Angeles after it is ruined. Alice (Mila Jovovich), together with Claire Redfield (Ali Larter) find a little group of survivors in a security prison, surrounded by the undead. The survivors want to get to "Arcadia", a ship that supplies food and shelter for survivors.
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While the survivors try to figure out how to get out of prison in Los Angeles and reach the "Arcadia", the undead manage to tunnel through the sewer ways and up into the prison. The survivors run away and after some of them die, they reach "Arcadia".

In my opinion, "Resident Evil: Afterlife" is a great movie with a lot of action and scary scenes.The actors act wonderfully and there are a lot of great effects in the movie. I highly recommend to see the movie because it is very good and successful and if I enjoyed it, I promise you will enjoy it too. The movie is suitable for teenagers, and people who enjoy alot of action. This is also a very nice movie to see with your friends.

Very Good work! Well done!
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Daphna

Big inventions in th 20th century- Fixed

In the 20th century there were many great and life changing inventions that made life easier and more comfortable. I think that the greatest and biggest invention that was invented in the 20th century is the personal computer.

The personal computer is used by a lot of people in the world. I think that the personal computer is the most genius invention in the last two centuries. With the personal computer you can do many things:Surf on the Internet, see videos, talk with friends, play video games and many more helpful and useful things.

Not everyone thinks the same as me. For example, my grandparents think that the refrigerator is the biggest invention. Before the refrigerator, people kept their food for a few days, and the food became impossible to eat. My parents think differently than my grandparents. They think that the Television is the best invention ever, because it helps us to be updated with the news around the world, and we can also watch comedy shows, drama shows, movies and many more, and all that just by clicking on the remote.

In conclusion, I think the personal computer is the greatest invention of the 20th century, but every generation has a differnt opinoin about the biggest invevtion ever. I think that the older generations, like my parents and my grandparents, have different opinions about this question because when they were young, those inventions were revolutionary and changed their life style, while the computer is quite a new invention, that most of the older generation don't use as much as I do.

excellent.
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Daphna

Describing myself - Fixed

My name is Dor Anavi. I am 14 years old. I study at Kugel High School in the ninth grade.
I am 1.67 meter tall. I am thin. My hair is brown and my eyes are black. I have an average family with 2 older brothers, Shlomi is the oldest and Shahar is younger than him. I am a happy person, friendly and with a sense of humor.

My hobbies are to play basketball and to play on the computer. I like basketball because it's a fast game and there is a lot of action during the game. I love to play on the computer with all my friends and chat with them. In my spare time, I do my homework, go with my family on trips or picnics and have a barbecue there.

My school - Kugel High School is very big. It has four buildings. The teachers in the school are excellent and they are the best teachers I have ever had, although they give a lot of homework. My favorite subjects in school are English , Math and Science. They are the most important for the future and I am really good at them.

My expectations from this coming year are to succeed in school and especially
in the important subjects (that I mentioned above). I am going to work hard until I succeed.

Great work.
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Daphna